tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3437415950287200344.post519991139057056181..comments2023-08-08T06:17:46.381-07:00Comments on MyndFood: Democratic Writing-Installment 1PJhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/17258618427009965643noreply@blogger.comBlogger8125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3437415950287200344.post-35384240631567619142007-10-05T16:53:00.000-07:002007-10-05T16:53:00.000-07:00Ok, so I have a wacked brain. I'm well aware, tru...Ok, so I have a wacked brain. I'm well aware, trust me.<BR/>But my thought was this: this person is a fairytale or fable character, one we all know. I haven't a suggestion of which one, just connect it some how.<BR/>Now I'm sitting here laughing because I know your readers will be thinking, "Geez, PJ, who's that gazelle freak suggesting you weave your desolate tale with an old fable?!"<BR/>Ok...I'll be checking myself in at the funny farm now...SheGazellehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17389563443160281249noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3437415950287200344.post-88897421270573198112007-10-05T16:08:00.000-07:002007-10-05T16:08:00.000-07:00Okay,pj, First of all great job on this writing pr...Okay,pj, First of all great job on this writing project you had me intrigued from the very beginning!! Now the way I see it this story could go many different ways, such as all those commented above. The way is see this one going however is that maybe he got involved or to close to some group or organization who try very hard to keep their secrets. Therefore he has been captured and that place where he is, is some sort of holding cell until they come back for him. Just a thought, my other idea is maybe that the scene described is some sort of daydream and this is what he feels in his mind! Trapped, Dirty, Alone, Exposed, with no one to talk to and nowhere to go. There is no way in or out your just stuck! He may be just a normal man with a normal life but maybe not! The possibilities are endless... let me know how it goes, I'm eager to hear the finished product!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3437415950287200344.post-18423201796245350642007-10-03T10:15:00.000-07:002007-10-03T10:15:00.000-07:00Anonymous:I like that; great idea!Anonymous:<BR/><BR/>I like that; great idea!PJhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17258618427009965643noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3437415950287200344.post-89576130307060941922007-10-03T09:44:00.000-07:002007-10-03T09:44:00.000-07:00Great first installment...Very descriptive! So, my...Great first installment...Very descriptive! So, my thoughts for the next installment: He should fall asleep or pass out or somethin, tired from his efforts of getting out. Then have a dream or somethin, more like a flashback, of someone like attacking him (maybe because of something he did or knew about but wasnt suppose to?). Then have him realize that whoever the person was and whatever the reason they wanted to hurt him, is how he got to wherever he's trapped now. Make sense? Just a thought...lookin forward to the next part!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3437415950287200344.post-43983253167313647112007-10-03T03:59:00.001-07:002007-10-03T03:59:00.001-07:00now that i think about it passing out and dreaming...now that i think about it passing out and dreaming is boring. and has been done before in other books and movies. so instead how about he gets really thristy and starts looking around for something to drink and discovers what looks like a bottle of water. and because he is in so much pain and dying of thrist he doesn't think to read the bottle and just guzzles it down. and a few mins. later starts having a drug induced hallucination that he was able to break free. after which he comes to in a drug haze only to realize he is still trapped in the bathroom and still as messed up as ever. and figures out that the stuff he drank caused it and finnaly reads the bottle. to discover it was alcohol or something. <BR/><BR/>i know i'm using horrible grammar and punctuation but this idea just came to me and i wanted to get it down before i forgot. :P also pj, you might have two entries to this. one before this one that i was typing up and as i clicked the publish button internet exploer messed up so i don't know if the first got sent or not so if it did delete the first one and keep this one.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3437415950287200344.post-7056533860367643202007-10-03T00:21:00.000-07:002007-10-03T00:21:00.000-07:00make it like a dream maybe he passes out or someth...make it like a dream maybe he passes out or something and dreams he gets out only to wake up and realize he didn't. <BR/><BR/>By the way this first part is awesome.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3437415950287200344.post-30486184205854195572007-10-02T23:21:00.000-07:002007-10-02T23:21:00.000-07:00Deanna emailed me a suggestion for the next instal...Deanna emailed me a suggestion for the next installment...<BR/><BR/>She said that he needs to get out...perhaps he can use something he finds in the room to pick the lock...<BR/><BR/>Your thoughts? I think it doesn't work...why?PJhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17258618427009965643noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3437415950287200344.post-2868982293781779452007-10-02T15:17:00.000-07:002007-10-02T15:17:00.000-07:00scary....scary....Katie Bookerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13637865673589060998noreply@blogger.com